Tuesday, April 29, 2008
Addiction
My hands are moving profusely...my eyes widen...my nostrils flare...I stare blankly at the wall, dying in need...my last dose was a week ago...Tuesday to be exact...people claim I have a morbid mentality...an abstract understanding of reality...reality is merely vague in my eyes...because of addiction...addiction to what?...the usage of diction which livens my lackluster canvas...elusive imagery which presents itself in the form of Hughes and Baldwin...I mean my mind is engrossed in these tales...when words are injected into my soul...a plethora of things suddenly unfold...urges of wanting more...being exposed to more...when I'm exposed...I'm vibrant...I'm in my own planet...I revolve around words...then the unexpected occurs...my appointment to fulfill my addiction is delayed...suddenly I'm scared...frantically searching for a subject of poignant interest...nothing...I feel like I'm melting...my mind is as insipid as a person drug-free...somebody help me for if I don't get a dose I'm hopeless...addiction was the reason why I wrote this...
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18 comments:
The words you choose to put on the page seem to flow and leaves you no choice but to be passionate about what your doing. keep up the good writing with words like this you can inspire.
man dat was some nice stuff man, u should keep on doing wat u doin only better can come from this man, duece
Ok CL that was tight right there..i see u tryna be a poet keep doin ya thing iight kid peace..-Skyler
yo my son this is your father jimi. im feeling these words man you be having ya blond moments but you can write kid
awwwww i'm so proud of my Carl. I've taught you oh so well :D
lol, beautiful work mister
ummmm. ok.. this is officially fly.. and imma need u 2 continue..
.. GooD jOb DaRlin... Oh YEa... n We ShoulD HAve A ciPher SOmetime...
Yes... Hotness... Poppington...
...Amari Ice said so.
Carl,
Wow!!! Who would have known. You're an amazing writer. Keep it cuz! Truly Talanted...
Nadine
Noodle*STAR
I love "Addiction." You are a poet!
I'm also very glad that "writing illuminates [your] day." I will refer future students to your profile (and blog) in hopes that they, too, will come to your insightful conclusion about diction and writing.
Signed,
Honored to have been your teacher
Great job Carl, ill be sure to check back soon.
- Stan
Very nice, an as always very well written, you're clearly talented and it's good to see someone enjoy writing as well because it is a wonderful thing
i like hope alot, but i feel as though i can connect more to addiction. this is great stuff carl, very powerful, and i hope that you keep writing.beautiful.
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.:Geanna LaFleur:.
truly creative and strong about his craft makes the reader question what they see themselves as when they look in the mirror
Okay, so I love reading your poetry! It is always so deep and meaningful! I really enjoyed both 'Hope' and 'Addiction'...
(I see you Mr. "Modern Day Hughes"! Keep on writing beautifully...)
- Sheri Lamb
Let me start by saying wow... let me then be really REAL. I am a pretty blunt person, and your writting is simply incredible. But the greater reality is that by watching your swagger it doesn't seem you. This "ladies man" that wallks with a backwards hat and a belt that "aint" servin it's original purpose LOL. I would be so intrested to see some other writtings that really may step on some things and unveil truth at Howard, out of the comfort zone. Anyway you have cultivated my attention, which is hard to get in itself, so keep it up!
that was really good man... the diction is a little awkward in certain places but its well done overall
practice makes perfect rite, keep it up and keep it coming.
If you do what you love and love what you do, then success can only follow
I never read any of your material... But this stuff is good. Keep it up and don't stop. You should definitely right in the hilltop... you should look into that for next semester
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